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As new era so-called ‘digital era’ has
emerged, not just things that required much of physical endeavor such as
banking paper works but also classes are getting converted into digital part. Naturally,
there is controversial issue on whether which is more beneficial to take
between online class and traditional class. Both have their own reasons. If I
were asked to choose one, I would say that traditional class will be more
beneficial for several reasons follow.
To
begin with, I can make friends through the conventional class. School is not
just about obtaining ‘information’ but also learn how to socialize with people
to become an integral part of society. If one takes online class, one will
definitely have less chances of interacting with one’s peers which makes one
hard to make friends. Using my experience as an example, I used to homeschool
for my elementary school so I was with my parents for the whole 6years so obviously,
I had no friends. And then I went to middle school in which I had to interact
with my classmates. I struggled for a bit but understood the atmosphere and was
so happy that I’ve never felt before. I played soccer, game, ate foods with my
friends who I still hang out with and will for rest of my life. Therefore,
traditional class overrides online class.
Moreover,
If I take conventional class, I can learn more efficiently. What I mean is that
it will be so much slower to get a feedback from professor in newly-formed
class than one that has been in the past. In traditional class, I can interact
with professor more by face-to-face and If there is something I do not get,
then I could ask right away. According to a research conducted in Bain company,
a highly respected consulting firm, 88 percent of participants have answered
they tend to absorb information more If they actively participate in class by
asking to professor and discussing with their colleagues. One can refute my
argument by saying online class can ask to professor too but that is not an immediate
answer which makes a clear difference. One may forget what to ask or even worse
why one asked. Hence traditional class far outweighs online class.
All
in all, every and each fact describes my resolute standpoint that classic class
is explicitly more helpful than online class because you can make friends out
of it and learn more practically. Consequently, there is nothing in my mind
doubts on my stance regarding the given statements.
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