■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Your Answer : There can be many reasons why students go to universities. Some people might go to university or college for new experiences, or to prepare for the future career. However, in my opinion, the most important reason for going to these schools is to learn and increase knowledge. I will explore two reasons on the following essay. to go to university is to enhance own knowledge.
First, tertiary schools are places where you can learn the most advanced knowledge about a subject unless going to a grad school university provides most advanced knowledge to people. Almost everybody graduates up to high school these days. However, the difference between what you learn in high school and college can be significant. high school and university knowledge is completely different. Most of the intensified subjects in mathematics or science are learned in college. For instance, one can learn simple methods of doing a differentiation on math class in high school, but in university, we can learn lots of other kinds of differentiation methods which is used in real life to make mechanical or electronic products. Also, in the case of science, we learn subjects strictly separated from each other in high school. In contrast, we learn subjects merged and fused together in university. As an example, we learn biology and chemistry integrated together and can learn chemical reaction on a biological process which we could not in high school.
Furthermore, I think we can learn not just theoretical knowledge but also human skills. People can actually learn knowledge by themselves alone. However, if there aren't people nearby us, we can't learn how to interact with them. I find these skills are crucial for those who major in liberal arts such as managing, marketing, and teaching. In these major, students get to have chances on practicing one another. For example, I took a marketing class, last year and have an experience of actually trying something I learned through the textbook by demonstrating in front of the class. Also, there are many classes proceeded by students formed into groups and trying the skills they have learned. This is necessary because in middle or high school we have much fewer chances of having it.
To sum up, I personally think by going to tertiary schools I can benefit most by learning theoretical knowledge but also I can learn the skills necessary to cope with other person.
Fair: 17~23 점수: 23 내용면에 있어서는 잘 서술된 에세이이지만. 지금 이 에세이에서 나타나는 가장 큰 문제는 구어체 입니다. 전반적으로 이 에세이를 읽으면서 느낀 것은 에세이 형태를 갖추고 있다는 것 보다는 구어체로 모든 것을 설명하는 거 같습니다. You로 주어를 사용하는 것 보다는 삼인칭 주어로 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 또한 이 에세이의 문제점은 문법적 오류입니다. 문법적 오류들이 있기 때문에 플로우를 방해하는 거 같습니다. 제가 첨삭한 것을 보시고 확인 하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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읽기 편하시라고 글자 크기를 늘렸습니다.
You 를 쓰는 것과 구어체를 쓰는 것이 버릇인 것 같아 큰일입니다.
담주 시험이고 28점이 목푠데 이렇게 해서 가능할까요? ㅜㅜ 낱말수는 더 늘려야되나요?