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Q A : Some people think that results of 1 or 2 exams are more adequate than many assignment to student. However, in my opinion, student need to a lot of assignment of learning class for the following few reasons. needs to study a lot of assignment to learn for the following subsequent reasons (일단 student는 단수 주어익고 동사가 빠졌습니다) First of all, student should get many experience in studying. I believe experience is most essential factors of success in this world. Imagine, student only have textbook knowledge. So their views will be so narrow. But their views can become narrowed. However, people do not want to participate some experience because it is very stressful as it can cause a lot of stressful conditions. By getting assignment and making group for study When people get assignment, they can not only gain diverse experience but also broaden their horizon of the world (어떤 방면에서 견해가 넓어지는 지 서술하시길 바랍니다). For example, when I was in (전치사가 없스면 난 대학이다라는 뜻을 가지게 됩니다) college, I took Database class and it had many assignment to student which had a plethora of assignment. I was very stressful but when I did, it remained a lot of experience of making database system and how could I built database structure. It was really helpful for me. Although it was stressful, after learning I could gain knowledge of database system and utilize it to real cases.
Second, a study was conducted by Korea Education Research Center what could most effective way of learning some subject or class to learn subject (그래서 이유가 무엇인가요? 바로 예시로 넘어가는 것은 좋지 않습니다). There was were (groups는 복수 주어입니다) two groups monitored. The first group was formed of people who got a lot of assignment. They were asked to tests to measure their level of achievement of taking class. The other group was consisted of people who were determined only 1 or 2 exams and given the same direction. The researcher compared the outcomes and recorded that the former group was (동사가 두 개입니다) got higher score than the latter group. The study demonstrate demonstrates (study는 단수 주어 입니다) that many assignment give student advantage of learning. To sum up, when student do assignment they get a lot of experience of this field and more higher level of achievement of getting knowledge. In this regard, I think many assignment class is better to learning for the I mentioned above learn
점수: 22 일단 각 단락들이 서로 잘못된 부분을 가지고 있는 에세이입니다. 첫 번째 단락 같은 경우는 어색하뇨 표현들이 많습니다. 이러한 부분들은 에세이로 하여금 플로우를 방해하기 때문에 주의하면서 서술하시길 바랍니다. 두 번재 단락 같은 경우에서는 이유가 나오지가 않았습니다. 이유를 구체적으로 서술하시고 예시로 넘어가시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. . |