▶ Your Answer :
Undoubtedly, study fields
play a significant role in people's daily lives in many of the places where
they play or work. Some people think that university students should consider
studying fields in which a significant job growth can be witnessed, such as science and technology; however, other people think that students have to pursue studying fields related to their
interest. Both sides have their own reasons to support their views. If I had
to choose one, I would say that university students should choose studying
fields which has a large increase in job openings.
The reason is that majoring
in demanding field is essential to live a life without risky situations in
today's uncertain society. Also, considering the fact that the importance of
fusion technology has grown recently, students can pursue the fields they are interested in, along with the fields which can provide stable job positions. For instance, when
my cousin was in university, he wanted to be a singer. He felt that doing what
he like to do for the rest of his life was very important issue to him. He
majored in computer science, but he wanted to become a famous dance singer like
Michael Jackson after participating in singing club. There was also his friend
sharing same thoughts with him. However, my mother advised my brother to continue his
career in computer science. They fought a lot, and he became a computer
scientist in Google who performs researches in a machine learning field. After a long
time, he realized that artificial intelligence can compose songs and produce music like the composer. He sang the songs made by the machine and became a
famous singer in the internet site named Youtube. Simultaneously, he earned a
lot of money from Google. On the other hand, his friend who continued to sing a
song became poor and felt envious of my brother; saying if he had chosen
promising jobs, he would have lived in stable condition. This implies that
doing what people like to do can betray themselves, so pursuing promising jobs
is the key to achieve greater success in life more than jobs they like to do.
Fortunately, people can still pursue their interest field based on the basic
fields such as science and technology as in the case of my cousin.
All in all, I firmly believe
that the advantage of choosing job fields which generate many jobs far
outweighs that of selecting fields people like to do. (본인이 주제에 대한 의견을 제시 후 이를 뒷받침하는 이유 또한 결론에서 요약해주세요)
- 이유 1개 + example이 제시되었는데 - GOOD 다음과 같은 (예시 분량이 조금 적은) reason2 + 예시 2가 제시 될 경우 좋은 성적을 받을 수 있습니다.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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