▶ Your Answer :
In the given set of
materials, the reading passage and the lecture deal with animal play to debate
whether there are several reasons why animals
play. The reading provides (is providing)
three pieces of evidence to prove its point, whereas the lecturer argues
against it by providing three compelling rebuttals.
The reading passage
asserts the idea that young animals play in order to consume their surplus
energy. They don’t need to spend every minute of the day hunting in order to
survive, so they become bored. So they play
in order to entertain themselves. The professor casts doubt because marine
animals (are) only consume their energy by playing.
(through play.)
The reading claims that
young animals can learn skills and strategies needed for their survival through
play. The professor refutes the idea because cats seem
to play for their own pleasure. (playing seem to be only entertainment.)
The play cannot develop their social skills.
(depending skill.)
The reading points out
that young animals develop social relationships through play. The professor
challenges the idea because the animals’
capacity of social relationship is innate, (in
born,) so they do not have to learn the skills.
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Writing
Score (0-30): 14-15
Score
(0-5): 2.00-2.25
Grammar
& Feedback: 우선은 글이 짧고
conclusion paragraph가 없습니다. 제시되는
근거가 부족하며
정보가 한정적
입니다. 그리고
사용하는 어휘와
문장의 구성이
단조롭습니다. 수고하셨습니다.