▶ Your Answer :
There might be some people who believe that rash decisions
are never right. However, I personally disagree with the above idea for
the two subsequent reasons. First, there can be emergency situations which
require hasty decisions. Second, hasty decisions save cost.
First, in emergency situations, people need to make
decisions rashly. For example, in some situations such as car accidents or
emergency patients who are sick in a sudden, we have to handle those problems
as fast as we can. This is because how fast we handle it is closely and
directly related to the lives of the patients. Let me bring up my mother’s story as an example. When I was in high school, my mother and
my aunt were going somewhere together by driving. In a sudden, the car crashed
another car and they were hurt severely. So, they made a hasty decision to call
911. They were moved to the hospital and treated soon. While being treated in a hospital, they also made several rash
decisions related to the treatments. And thanks to the fast and right
decisions, they could get treatments properly and get better soon.
Second, people can save cost in general when they make
decisions hastily. What this means is that people can reduce the cost by using
intuition or some simple knowledge when making decisions and use the cost for
other purposes. In contrast, when people intend to make decisions more
carefully, they spent more money to gather information and opinions from
diverse channels. According to a study done by Korea University, 80% of the
respondents said that they made more rash decisions than careful decisions.
This is due to the fact that there are very many decisions to make in their
everyday lives and it is really difficult for them to make every efforts for
every decisions. They need to save expenses for decisions as well as the time.
This example clearly shows that hasty decisions help people reduce cost.
In conclusion, rash
decisions save not only time in emergency situations but also cost in everyday
lives. In this regard, I strongly believe that hasty decisions can be the right
ones.
Good (24–30)
첫번째 본문 -while 절에서 being 동명사로 쓰여야 주어로 쓰일 수 있습니다.
첫번째 두번째 본문 다 본인의 주장과 글의 주제에 적절한 설명/예시를 사용하셨습니다. 왜 hasty decision이 때로는 필요하고 어떤 이점이 있는지 설득력있게 쓰셨습니다. 문법/표현도 괜찮습니다.
수고하셨습니다~~
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