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Parents always worry about how they should
spend their time with children. Parents usually want to be both educational and
fun, but the best way to be with children is letting them to be relaxed with their
parents. Children can study at school and home as well, but home is the only
place where they can fully rest and play a game with parents.
First of all, a home should be a place
where a child can rest, not where a child should feel a pressure to do something. If you do
homework with your children, the children would feel stress even in their home.
However, playing sports would definitely release their stress. When I was little(구체적이지는 않더라도 대략적인 연령대를 제공하는 것이 좋습니다), my mother used to help me solving mathematics homework. At that time, I
felt a big pressure because I did not want to disappoint my mother. On the
contrary, my father always played football with me to release my stress. Thanks
to my father, I could be more relaxed with him when I was at home. As you can see from my example, playing games can be much better for the children’s happiness.
Furthermore, playing games can be a great
opportunity to build a firm relationship between parents and children. Most of
games and sports are team-based activities. While they are playing games, parents
and children can act as a team, aiming for the same goal. My father and I used
to play a tennis, against my mother and older brother. My father and I were always
serious on our tactics, and we won most of the scores. Since then, he and I have been the best team in the world. We always support each other. Without those
moments, I might not have this much of strong relationship with my father. (GOOD)
To conclude, I strongly believe that parents
should spend more time with their children by playing games and sports with them.
Playing games would definitely release children’s stress while their home.
Furthermore, the parent-child relationship can be enhanced by playing games
together.
Writing 0–30 score scale: Limited (1-16) / Fair (17-23) / Good (24–30)
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ORGANIZATION
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PROGRESSION AND COHERENCE
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LANGUAGE USE
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GRAMMAR
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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GOOD
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FAIR
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각 카테고리별 SCORE: LIMITED / FAIR / GOOD
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