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Some people think that it is not necessary to learn basic economics for all high students. However in my opinion, high school students are should be educated basic economics. There are two reasons; First, through education about basic economics, they can have much money later. Second, today, students should know diverse knowledge for living. (Awkward sentence, You should mention " the first reason is that~) First of all, people can have much property when they learn about economics. In this materialistic society, money is sometimes regarded as one`s power. If one have no money, they is considered as a loser and would be ignored. They don`t have no space to stand in this society. In other words, money is so important at present and knowing about economics helps one earn money. For example, there was a poll conducted by the board of business, with CEO as respondents. The purpose of the survey was to understand the consensus about correlation between economic education and earn`s bulk in today`s society. The majority of respondents ranked learing about education over being not learning about it. An overwhelming 80% responded that when people are young, they should learn about economics basically. The reason was that knowing about economics helps one work related to business. This survey proves that people should know economics. (All sentences are seemingly awkward, It doesn't include main ideas and thoughts)
Second, today one should know diverse areas. when it comes to knowledge, it is required for people to have a wide variety of knowledge rather than deep knowledge of one specific field. A person with sufficient knowledge is regarded as 'a person of intellect' in this world, while others who lack knowledge are simply ignored. Especially, in the complicated society at present, one should know besides one`s own specific field. My friend is a good example. My friend is a engineer. When he was high school, he didn`t learn about economics since he didn`t have to take a lecture about economics was an optional course to take in his school. After he graduated the university, he started his business. However, he doesn`t know about management and even basic economics principal. So he bankrupt because of financial burden. Therefore, regardless of one`s major, one should know about economics.
To sum up, there are two reasons that earning money and the importance of economic`s knowledge are the main reason I support. Therefore, I firmly hold that people should learn about economics when the are in high school.
| 채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 2 | 2 | 2 | Score | Limited 16-18 | - economics에 대한 basic 한요소라면, how economic works, what is the role of money in capitalistic society, GDP, GNP 등등이 왜 사업상에 그리고 earning money에 도움이 되는지 구체적으로 서술해주셔야 합니다.
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