Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.
Job seekers have pondered to scale of company ponder a lot regarding with the size of a company. Some prefer large company because of sufficient salary, others prefer small company in order to accumulate their experience and career. In my opinion, I prefer large company to small one. There are following two subsequent reasons why I advocate working large company. for the following two subsequent reasons.
For starters, welfare for employees in the large company is much better than that of small one To begin with, large company provides better welfare system. In general, the income of large companies are more than that of small ones are higher. Naturally, This is the reason why large company afford to offer the welfare for them so that they can support better qualified welfare system . For example, I visited two broadcasting stations, MBC and OBS. There is gulf between MBC, where is rich broadcasting station in nationwide and OBS, where is poor one in local area. Needless to say, the income of MBC is much larger than that of OBS. This gap between two broadcasting has made the scale of welfare for employees significantly different. There is good and gigantic fitness center in MBC. If they are working on MBC, they freely use the service. On top of that, there is luxury cafeteria in MBC. Assorted nutritionist cooks the best lunch and dinner for them every day. However, there are neither fitness club nor luxury cafeteria in the OBS. Else, many welfare for employees, such as bonus, maternity leave allowances, and the period of vacation between two broadcasting is different. Every welfare factors for employee in MBC is superior.
Next, large company is better workplace to accumulate their career than small one, for these company offer the job seeker to a positive step which is possible to challenge something. The employee in large company should be responsible for project with the versatile co-worker. Above all, this experience of interaction between co-workers is good effect to achieve something. Indeed, many people who engaged in large company often found own enterprise and even some of them made own lucrative model while other person who worked in the small company cannot dare to do. For example, there are very famous app or messenger , so called 'Kakao Talk', in South Korea. The co-founder who made this worked the large telecommunication company. In early 2010, they quit the company and they consider how to make chatting service without additional fee during a transition period of smartphone app. So they invented app 'KaKao Talk ', which is sensational app at that time. But In many interview of media outlet, they told unanimously that the experience of large telecommunication company is most important factor to invent the app.
To sum up, because the large company offers best welfare for employee and laborer and the best workplace which is able to achieve employee's dream, I prefer large company to small company. Albeit it is difficult for job seeker to pass large company because of high competitive rate, knocking in the large company would be clever choice if one basks in best welfare and has a large desire to change the world.
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일단 이 에세이에서 약간 아쉬운 점은 첫 번째 단락에서의 예시 부분입니다. 굳이 MBC와 OBS에 모든 것을 비교할 필요는 없는 거 같습니다. 그냥 둘에 차이가 이러하다 따라서 큰 회사들이 사람들에게 더 좋은 일할 조건을 마련할 수 있다라는 것만 명시해도 좋았을 거 같습니다. 이 부분을 재외하면서 전체적으로 설명이 아주 잘 되어 있는 에세이인거 같습니다. 설명이 잘되어 있기 때문에 각 단락 안에서 본인이 무엇을 말하고자 하는 지를 잘 알 수 있었던 에세이엿습니다. 수고많으셨습니다.