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Most of students have their own style of
studying. The way of studying depends on chronically tendency (여기서 말하는 chronicle tendency가 뭔가요? 주제를 벗어난 느낌이 듭니다) of students. I
prefer to study alone. In this essay, I will present two reasons to support my
idea. for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, it is better to concentrate
on studying when I am alone concentration can be increased when studying alone. I can dedicate myself to only studying besides
many distractions intriguing my interest preventing from many distractions that hinders the focus. Although I like to hang out with my
friends and stay with them even while studying, it is just an illusion for me (illusion for me에 대한 구체적인 설명이 필요할 거 같습니다. 이렇게 만 언급되면 이것의 의미가 무엇인지 파악하기가 어렵습니다). I
am easily enticed by a trivial happening. Also, I am apt to answer every question
from my friends. In other words, I am prone to be agitated by surroundings. For
example, I me and my friend studied together for mid-term exam a year ago. Every
time, he asked me something. I answered habitually. Then I was astonished
because time flew fast without any achievement. On the contrary to this In contrast, I
studied alone this year to fulfill a requirement of scholarship. I realized
that studying alone is great in terms of quietness. I became more enthusiastic
about studying because there was nothing to care about except it.
Moreover, I can study independently. Since I
usually study at least more than 6 hours, my timetable extends either lunch
time or dinner time. Thus, if I am with my friend, I should ask him when we eat
lunch or dinner because doing something together is one of Korean culture. In addition,
if I me and friend live near or have same way to go home, we normally wait for
each other until one ends. Last year, when I prepared a mid-term exam with my
friend, I spent almost whole day with him. My friend periodically felt hungry
at 11:00 am, whereas it was the time I concentrate very well. In retrospect, I
should have not been subordinate to his time. However, it was burdensome to
decline. I learned from the experience that studying suitable for my time
schedule is more efficient.
In a nutshell, I tried to study with a
group of friends formerly. However, it was less effective than studying alone. My
studying style to get a good result or grade is studying alone.
Fair: 17~23 점수: 21 지금 이 에세이는 두 가지 부분에 잇어서 오류를 범하고 있습니다. 먼저 첫 번째는 구체적인 설명이 없으면 의미가 파악 할 수 없는 부분들이 있습니다. 특히 이러한 부분은 첫 번째 단락에서 많이 보여지는데. 정확한 설명이 들어가 있지 않기 때문에 이 부분에서 뭘 의미하고자 하는 것인지 잘 모르겠습니다. 두 번째는 너무 구어체 입니다. I가 계속 나와있는데. 지금 이 에세이의 느낌은 자신의 personal한 얘기를 듣는 거 같은 느낌이 듭니다. 따라서 좀 더 에세이 형태에 알맞게 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. |