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Some people might think that our leisure time after two decades will be decreased than today after 20 years. However, I think we can enjoy much more leisure time than that of how much we have these days, because of the rapid development of the science and technique. First, the technique will grow unimaginably after 20 years. Since our technique technology develops so fast that our parent's generation can't follow up the current flow in a year or two between 1~2 years, the circumstances of the twenty years later future are even not conceivable. Super developed science will replace a large number of things what people do today such as surgery, house work and etc. To take an example of my house, in on weekend, our my family usually does cleaning by separating each work per person. I clean the room with do the vacuum cleaner, my brother washes dishes, and my parents do laundry or recycling. However, after 20 years, there will be a robot, that only requires us pressing a single button. If we demand the robot of doing all the house chores, it will do everything including complicated work we want as ordered even if we don't control all the complicated programs that is set on the robot. So as a result, the only thing my family has to do is to can charge the robot for the work and then go outside to enjoy our leisure. This kind of happening may not be confined to only our my family, but to all families in the world. Second, again, thanks to the great development of the science, the industry of the leisure will be prospered much better than now, in 2028. Since there are lots of various things enhanced to enjoy, the culture of the city will be changed. Whenever it's holiday in these days, people are During the holiday, the famous spots and city is always crowded with people and traffics are is jammed because the whole families in the city wants to take a chance to get some rest since they spend most of their time in working their daily life is full of working in week days, but in the future, it will be different. For example, people's working hours time will be decreased so the employee's average time of going home will be earlier. (What does it mean?) This means they have much time to take a rest spend their time resting and to spend with their family, and their every daily life is more relaxing and untighten than before which is now, so their daily is just the leisure time itself! Having some vacation or enjoying leisure time may not be a special event in the future anymore. To sum up, appreciating to the consequence of constant science and technology, I believe that people's life will firmly be full of leisure time than nowadays.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 3
| 2 | 3 | Score | Fair 16-19 | - 미래와 관련하여 첫 번째 내용은 AI에 대하여, 두 번째는 구체적이지는 않지만, working hour가 줄어든다는 점에서 포인트를 잘 잡으신 것 같아요.
- 다만 어법이나 표현방식이 다소 미숙하고, 두 번째의 구체적인 근거가 없어 아쉬운 점이 있습니다.
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