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Many people might prefer to travel without (without는 붙여진 단어 입니다) the tour guide. There are some several benefit from traveling only with group members. It is free to make a plan and does not have to rush for the time (인트로에서는 방향성만 알려주는 것 입니다 불필요한 정보는 필요 없습니다). However, I believe the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. It is so convenience that does not have to make a plan and easy to go around with a tour bus for the following two subsequent reasons (이미 밑에서 다 이야기를 할 것이기 때문에 인트로에서 장황하게 서술할 필요가 없습니다)
First and foremost, many people are struggling to make a plan before their trip. Some of them had argument with members for the plan and scheduling 3 or 4 days are really complicated stuff. in planning as it takes a lot of complicated process But However, (문장을 시작할 때는 however로 하시길 바랍니다) when we tour with guide, we do not have to make a plan and guide will take me to the good place as guide will explain all the important and valuable places. Tour guide is expert about hot spot and local food. So we can save our time to not thinking about where must go, or what should eat not to think on unnecessary elements. In my experience, I always feel stressful and lazy before go trip for making plan going on a trip. However, I have been travel with tour guide once with my family, It was really convenience. I also really like the places where we went. It was so good trip. when I traveled with tour guide during family trip, it was really convenient and enjoyable.
Secondly, I have been travel many times with my friend individually (시작부터 잘못 되었습니다 이유가 나타나지 않았어요). I always feel that using transportation is so difficult and expensive. It was difficult to buy a card and some times google map did not work well. In contrast, traveling with guide, I can look around with the bus. It is more convenience and comfortable convenient and comfortable (convenient가 더 적절한 표현입니다). In my experience, I For example, when I went to Canada, I have a memory that I spent lots of time for looking to look for the bus and subway. Map did not work well, and when I found a subway station, it was really difficult to buy a tickets tickets (단수 복수 형태는 못 서술합니다). So this is why I prefer the trip with a tour guide.
For these reasons, I really like to travel with tour guide more than individual. It is more easy easiest (최상급 표현입니다 왜냐하면 뒤에거 best이기 때문에) and best way to save the time. If we do not know well about the country that going to travel, have a trip with group of people with tour guide might be the best way to enjoy travel.
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