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There are many people around us who think that to achieve knowledge by books is the best way to learn. However, I believe to watch television is more beneficial in many ways in terms of learning process. This is because it promotes people to remember for a long time and it makes people to learn more interesting things.
To begin with, people can remember longer if television is utilized in a learning process. To remember something, getting information through multiple channels is crucial part because it actively stimulates our brain activity. When people read a book, we only use our visual sensory to gain information. On the other hand, a television is a multimedia system which provides sound with moving images together. Thus we can gain more highly active brain function during watching television, enabling people to remember a longer period. Take my personal experience for example, I still remember educational movies that I watched when I was a ten. However, I have had no ideas about the books that I read in that period. I believe this experience would apply to most people as well. In this regard, a television is better learning tool than a book because it promotes our memory function.
Moreover, people can concentrate well when watching television. Usually, people get easily bored when reading a just plain text. But in a television, we can watch well-formed productions that promote our interests. Regardless to say, to be concentrated on the learning subjects is a very essential aspect. For example, people can gain useful information by watching animal documentary films. No one thinks it as a study but they just watching it because it is interesting. Naturally, they absorb knowledge that contained in the film without get bored. If people try to learn about the animal using a book, it must be a very boring process than to watch television. This is not only for animal documentary films, but also the target learning subjects can be extended to other fields as well. In this regard, a television is a more efficient learning util because it is more interesting for learners.
To sum up, I am convinced that people can learn more by watching television because people can remember longer period and it is more interesting learning strategy. Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons I have mentioned above.
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