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The lecturer argues that it is doubtful
that the Little Ice Age was caused by three processes which are mentioned in the reading argues. This
contradicts the reading passage’s claim that the Little Ice Age was bring brought about
by cooling of the Gulf Stream, volcanic eruptions and decrease in the
population.
First, the lecturer contends that a theory
that the theory which insists that the Gulf stream evoked the Little Ice Age is hard to believe. The Gulf
Stream provoked temperature to drop down in countries of Europe like Ireland and Great
British Britain and just Northern Europe. However, countries of the Southern Hemisphere like New Zealand
South Africa experienced the Little Ice Age even though the which Gulf Stream was not near
them. On the contrary, the reading passage contends that the Gulf Stream
affected the Little Ice Age to appear.
Next, the speaker gives a voice that the volcano eruption could not affect temperature to decrease in that day. For instance,
Tembora in Indonesia volcano erupted. (화산의 이름이 tembora 라는 건가요? 문장을 정확하게 적어주셔야 합니다!) After this situation, many ashes appeared
and cover the sun which also called that year without summer. Theory said that the
little ice age was continued over the centuries that made super volcano to
appear. (여기도 순서가 애매하네요. 문맥에 따르면 화산이 먼저, 그 다음에 빙하기인데 정작 문장의 내용은 그 반대로 읽힙니다. 제가 지문을 접하지는 못해서 확실히 고쳐드릴 수가 없네요ㅠㅠ) However, there were no any super volcano erupted back then. Contrary to
the lecturer’s claim, the reading passage insists that volcano eruptions made lowered the temperature decline.
Finally, the speaker asserts that the forest
could not grow up quickly because of the effect of affected by temperature. By 1450, Europe population the population of Europe was
back to Pre-Black death level, which caused deforestation by people this situation caused to deforest by people.
Therefore, carbon dioxide was increased by this and this rule out the tree
theories. This refutes the reading passage’s claim that the decrease in the population can
affect carbon dioxide to drop down and had global cooling lowered carbon dioxide and made global cooling.
총평: 문법 오류가 되게 많은 편입니다. 통합형의 핵심은 지문을 접해보지 않은 사람이 글을 읽어도 지문의 내용을 완벽하게 이해할 수 있도록 서술하는 것인데, 현재 지문을 접하지 않는 제가 읽었을 때 지문의 일부만 상상이 갑니다. 일단 제가 문맥을 고려해 최대한 문법 오류를 수정해드렸으므로 참고해보시고 꾸준히 문법 학습을 겸해주세요! 수고하셨습니다 :)
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