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Some people might say that the most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. They believe it is a part of methods to sell more products. Advertisements can attract the people. However, in personally I strongly disagree with the statement. This is due to be honest to customer is important and company should sell products with their own merits for the following two subsequent reasons.
First of all, the company should not tell a lie to customer to earn the money. Honest is the best important thing from sellers and buyers. It can be caused cause serious problem in the future. It can loose lose (단어 사용이 적절치 않습니다) many customer. Customer can distinct the fake advertisement and they are usually read the review of the products from reading a review from the products. Some people might say," this company products always different from advertisement are different from other advertisement (동사가 없습니다). " For this one comments, people will start to stop buying products in that company. And also fake Fake advertisements is morality problem can cause moral problems. It is kind of deception. This can be illegal. Who earn money with those advertisement should be punished. Sell the products with deception is the best way to fall down.
More over, many company already know that earn money with advertisement made different from real earning money from advertisement is not real. Sell the products with own technology means have confident and famous companies do not make fake advertisement Selling the products with own technology makes the product more confident. Best company such as Apple does not earn money with exaggerated advertisement exaggeration. They are already proud with their products and very confident to sell with out deception in selling. what I mean is, company should have confident with their products and sell honestly. The only company who think their products are not good enough sell thinks their products are not good enough sells (company는 단수 주어 입니다) products with advertisement that shows product much more better than real distorting the image. Company should have competition with honest advertisement with their own technology. That makes their reputation more higher and caused positive effects to customer. Earn money in honestly with own advanced products deserved the success. For this, not many company trying to make advertisement fake.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree with the given statement for the reasons mentioned above. Some one said exaggerated advertisement can help to sell the products. This can be only once. Customer are well know about the products and you need to think top companies are not using fake advertisement.
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