▶ Your Answer : It has become controversial whether having it is better to have a broad knowledge from academic subjects is better than having specific knowledge from one subject. Some may say that specific knowledge from one subject can bring a practical result. However, I agree with the given statement as it is obvious that there are a lot of advantages when having broad knowledge. My reasons are as follows.
First of all, having wide knowledge from informative subjects can extend a person's perspective. This is because when people see and study about various things, people naturally can adapt a variety of instructive prospectives. Having wide perspective can be helpful for their life. For example, when I was a university student, because I had wide interest in instructive subjects, I studied various kind of subjects. After I graduated from the university, I had a job interview. The interviewer interviewe gives gave me a question about many different subjects as well as out of my major. At that time, I could answer thanks to my various perspectives that came from the study at university. As a result, I could get my job. It means that having a broad knowledge from academic subjects can be helpful in one's life.
Second, because we are living in the competitive comepetitive society, having only a specific knowledge can not guarantee our survival. These days, a lot of people study various fields and to get wide knowledge. They know that having a broad knowledge is essential for their company life. This is because the tasks in company require is required wide knowledge. There is a limit for the people with only one specific knowledge. For example, when I worked in a marketing company, I met a new colleague. Even if the task we worked on together was not his field, he did it very well. I wondered how he could do it well that. So I asked him about it and he anwered answered that he always studied study various kinds of subjects because it helped helps his works . This is the reasons why having a broad knowledge is important for the company tasks.
In conclusion, I agree with the given statement based on the reasons I mentioned above.
Comment : 시야를 확장시켜주고 사회에서 살아남는 데 경쟁력이 되어준다는 기본 주장은 논제에 대한 답변으로 아주 좋습니다. 하지만 각 본론에서 내용을 설명할 때 반복적인 내용이 많고 문법오류가 많아 전달력이 약하다는 점은 아쉽습니다. 내용 흐름을 좀 더 다듬고 정확한 문법 표현에 신경써주시면 좋을 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Independent Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 An essay at this level is marked by one or more of the following : - Addresses the topic and task using somewhat developed explanations, exemplifications and/or details (일정 수준의 설명과 예시를 활용하여 문제의 요구사항을 해결함) - Displays unity, progression and coherence, though connection of ideas may be occasionally obscured (문맥이 모호한 부분들이 있을 수 있으나 통일성, 연속성, 일관성이 어느 정도 드러남) - May demonstrate inconsistent facility in sentence formation and word choice that may result in lack of clarity and occasionally obscure meaning (문장의 구성 또는 어휘의 선택에서 내용의 명확성이 떨어지거나 의미 전달이 불분명한 부분들이 있음) - May display accurate but limited range of syntactic structures and vocabulary (답안의 내용은 주제에 부합하지만 제한된 문장구조나 어휘를 사용함) |