■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
|
|
|
▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. |
|
|
|
Today, some people asserts that educating children these days is a more difficult task these days due to a number of diversions such as cell phone, online games and social networking Web site. I think, however, it is unacceptable statement for following reasons.
First of all, although there are a lot of things which can make children hard to study, like online games I just mentioned above, but it does not make senses because these things do more good than harm for their convenient functions. In modern society, many latest technological devices we use now are tremendous helpful in studying. For instance, when learning foreign language, we can use an electronic dictionary that is faster than paper dictionary. Not only that, it also can participate in a class in Internet. Aand as long as using it properly, I suppose that children can make progress easily and quickly in education field. Furthermore, speacking for myself, I also had an experience that my child Kyle had benefits through Internet classes, because our family lived in so distant suburb that we could not couldn't let Kyle studying in promising school in city;, however, my wife and me went to lengths to find proper class that Kyle could join and we decided to put Kyle in Internet class. As a result, Kyle had a lot of benefits from it. Consequently, I found that more developing technology could help us to educate children in fact.
Furthermore, I am convinced that today's devices and contents can bring children a many interesting experience as long as we utilize it in reasonable way. In the past, we know that there are so many scarce resources, opportunities, and information in surrounding environment., Bbut In these days, we can access it more easily and effectively by searching cell phone, online Web sites and so on. To bolster my opinion, I memorized that I read an interesting survey in New York Times about how many people think about the positive effects of Internet., Tto my surprise, over 90 percent of people think that Internet have more positive effects than negative effects. If we can use that more wisely like educating children using Youtube to get some information about the assignments which their ere teacher gave, we can expect bigger accomplishments iIn our children's education. In economic and educational way, I think it would be killing two birds with one stone, so to speak. In short, it is so evident that educating children nowadays is easier than in the past.
To sum up, I think that many technology devices today we can use do not influence children negatively for reasons I mentioned above. In this regard, I suggest that we can educate our children easier in the past.
Fair/Good (20-24)
서론
-요즘에: these days
첫번째 본문
-모음 앞에는 an
-대소문자 오류
-축약형 지양해주세요 couldn't-->could not
-철자 오류
두번째 본문
-나는 확신한다: I am convinced that~
-scarce resources 인데 앞에 so many 가 나오면 앞뒤가 맞지 않습니다.
-세번째 줄에서, 문장이 너무 길어지므로 쪼개주세요.
-여섯번째 줄에서, , to my surprise 로 문장 두개 이을 수 없습니다. 쪼개어 주세요.
-그들의: there--> their
본문 1과 2의 내용 비슷합니다. 같은 주장에 예시만 다른 느낌입니다. 주장/설명 더 상이하게 해주세요.
수고하셨습니다~~