▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there is an ample support for the
author's claim that there are a few assumptions about why Angkor collapsed. However, the professor in the lecture gives several reasons as a
rebuttal to the author's point.
First, the professor argues that it does not make sense that
foreign invasion caused the collapse of Angkor. Generally speaking, invaders
try to keep the population to take more advantage of them. Likewise, if there
had been some invaders, they would have made citizens of Angkor stay. 사람들이 남아 있지 않았다는 점도 같이 언급해줘야 할 것 같아요. This
counters the reading passage's assertion that since Angkor was rich city, many
invaders occupied the kingdom.
Second, the professor contends that it is not plausible that
the decline of population resulted from a changed religion from Hinduism to Buddhism Buddihism. It is because there had always been
always a variety of religions and moreover, temples of Hinduism lost the power
even before Buddhism Buddihism coming. This casts doubts on the reading passage's
suggestion that Buddhism Buddihism caused the population to decline reduce because they no
longer went to Hinduism temples to worship near which where they usually lived near.
Finally, the professor insists that a great drought cannot
be the reason for decline in population of Angkor. Scientists found many evidences
that more severe droughts had happened 100 years before the collapse. It means
people in Angkor could have handled managed to droughts and known how to survive. This
refutes the reading passage's idea that there was a long drought which brought
about the breakdown of Angkor., given that they found tree rings which shows
that a drastic drought occurred at that time.
21mins
260 words
Comment : 두 지문이 대립되는 요소가 잘 드러나게 잘 정리해주셨어요. 다만 아직 요약문이라 보기에는 분량이 많은 편이니 중복되는 부분을 줄이고 서술을 더 간결하게 다듬는 작업이 필요할 것 같습니다. 통합형은 150~200단어 정도 분량이 적절하다고 하니 참고해주세요. 오탈자, 시제오류도 체크해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 4/5 A response at this level is generally good in selecting the important information from the lecture and in coherently and accurately presenting this information in relation to the relevant information in the reading, but it may have minor omission, inaccuracy, vagueness, or imprecision of some content from the lecture or in connection to points made in the reading. A response is also scored at this level if it has more frequent or noticeable minor language errors, as long as such usage and grammatical structures do not result in anything more than an occasional lapse of clarity or in the connection of ideas.
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