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There has been an
argument regarding the issue of whether the extended family is less important
now than it was in the past or not. Some people maintain that it is not a good
way living to live in big family.
However, from my perspectives, it I
would say that there are more benefits to live with a
big family.
To begin with,
living in a big family plays a significant role in broadening personal horizons
in a society where the self-centered view is
prevalent. It exposes people to different lifestyles, customs, and cultures.
Such exposure is likely to acknowledge people
that different values exist, understand this diversity, and ultimately be
comfortable with it. For example, when I was in high school, I saw one of my
classmates who came from Ethiopia eating his meal with bare hands. I felt very
uncomfortable by his behavior because it was my first time seeing someone like
that. I kept my distance from him and sometimes made fun of him. However, after
living with my uncle who had lived in Ethiopia, I got used to this cultural
difference. I realized that we just had a different
eating style. In fact, we had a lot in common in a way that we cared about
families and friends, were committed to relationships, and were easily hurt by what others saying say. I no longer feel awkward and can keep in touch
with them. Without my living with diverse persons in a
big family, I would not have been able to understand them in depth.
In addition, when
people live with a lot of people, it will help people them (대명사 사용을 더 해주세요) strengthen their emotional bond and the feeling of security
in their relationships. It gives them a chance to socialize with their loved
one by getting to know and understand each other while spending more time with
them. Being with people they cared about tends to prevent them from
feeling lonely in today’s
cynical society. For instance, when my younger sister was in high school, she
often felt depressed thinking that her life
became an exhausting routine. To survive in a competitive world, every students
(every 후에 오는 명사는 단수여야
합니다) spent the whole day
studying all academic subjects hoping that they could out do others. It was
difficult to make friends she could rely on since all of them seemed busy and
indifferent to others, treating each other as rivals. Fortunately, she was able
to get over her feeling of loneliness by talking to her family who live that lived together with her.
She was able to seek for advice and share her trouble with them anytime in
various topics because there are were a lot of people from different backgrounds lived with her. Such an example clearly depicts that
people should live with extend family.
In a nutshell, my
contention is that living with many people is beneficial for people. This is
because of broadening they can broaden their
horizons and getting get over loneliness.
All in all, the importance of make living in a big
family cannot be overestimated in current
society.
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