▶ Your Answer :
In the reading passage, there is an ample support for the
author’s claim that there are several doubtful issues on Monte Verde. However,
the professor in the lecture gives a few reasons as rebuttal to the author’s
point.
First, the professor insists that it is true that there is
no sharp enough tool to hunt large animals, but there were plenty of vegetables
and moreover, with simple stones, they people could have killed small animals, which
they could subsist have subsisted on. 어떤 주장에 대한 반박인지가 불분명합니다. 서론에서 먼저 Monte Verde에 관한 '어떤 이슈'를 다루는지를 분명히 해주세요. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s
suggestion that if people had lived in Monte Verde there, there should have found keep a weapon
to catch animals, which was are essential to live.
Second, the professor argues that they found some artifacts artificial
under the layer that could have been used for farming. 'they'가 칭하는 것이 무엇인지 불분명합니다. 키워드를 밝혀서 써 주세요. To be specific put it this way, under the
surface, the layers are intact, so remains found in the land would not have
touched. This refutes the reading passage’s idea that there are, nowadays, many
farmers who could damage the land and artifact as well.
Finally, the professor contends that it is understandable
that some claim that the dating method, radiocarbon dating, is not accurate.
However, they have utilized not only radiocarbon analysis, but also other ways.
This counters the reading passage’s claim that radiocarbon dating that
scientists usually use is not correct when they put bitumen analysis on it.
Comment : 전반적으로 요약문에 부수적인 내용만 정리되어 있고 '어떤 point'에 대한 주장 대립인지가 명확히 드러나 있지 않습니다. Monte Verde에 대해 두 지문이 어떤 입장을 취하고 있는지를 서론에서 분명히 제시하고, 각 본론에서도 자신의 '입장'을 뒷받침하기 위해 사용한 주장들을 정리해주세요. 현재 답안에서는 'they'라 칭하는 내용도 불분명해서 핵심요소를 드러내기에는 아쉬운 점들이 많습니다. 두 지문이 다루는 main topic과 핵심 요소가 잘 드러나게끔 보완해주세요~ 수고 많으셨습니다~!
Integrated Writing Rubrics Score 3/5 A response at this level contains some important information from the lecture and conveys some relevant connection to the reading, but it is marked by one or more of the following : - Although the overall response is definitely oriented to the task, it conveys only vague, global, unclear, or somewhat imprecise connection of the points made in the lecture to points made in the reading. - The response may omit one major key point made in the lecture. - Some key points made in the lecture or the reading, or connections between the two, may be incomplete, inaccurate, or imprecise. - Errors of usage and/or grammar may be more frequent or may result in noticeably vague expressions or obscured meanings in conveying ideas and connections.
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