▶ Your Answer :
The reading passage and lecture are
about both talk about whether Genetic Modified foods are beneficial or not to human being for human as a whole. In
the reading passage, there is ample support for the author’s claim that GM
foods are helpful in many ways. However, the professor in the lecture gives
several reasons as a rebuttal to the author’s point.
First of all, the lecturer contends
that the merits of GM crops are exaggerated to solve the starvation problems.
She asserts that there exists a lot of food already but they are not scattered
properly in the world. Thus, destitute people in need cannot have access to the
food. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that hunger issues can be
resolved by GM food.
On top of that, the professor insists
that GM food cannot lower the price of food, but it rather increases the costs
of food which consumers can buy so that consumers cannot buy. It (it이 가르키고 있는 대상이 무엇인가요?) takes a lot of money to change genes of crops.
Besides, GM crops require more moisture. Therefore, GM food precipitates more expensive
price in the market in turn. Her argument goes against the one made in the
reading passage, which asserts that GM food can help make the price of food
down by providing resilient characteristic. decrease the price of food by providing resilient characteristic (동사가 두 개입니다)
Finally, the lecturer argues that
vaccines are made used of as much as in the past are more flourished in comparison to the past (동사가 두 개입니다). Cool environment is still
necessary for vaccines not to rot. However, the cool environment such as stores
is not equipped well in poor countries even if the new intriguing vaccines are
introduced. This refutes the reading passage’s suggestion that the vaccines can
spread wider than earlier ones.
점수: 23 일단 약간의 문법적 오류들은 제가 첨삭한 것을 보면서 숙지하시길 바랍니다. 통합형 에세이에서 가장 중요하게 보는 것은 한 주제에 대하여서 서로 다른 정보를 가지고 있는 리딩과 리스닝이 어떻게 비교하고 반박을 하는 것인지를 보는 것 입니다. 지금 이 에세이 같은 경우는 리딩에 대한 부분을 구체적으로 서술하시지 않았습니다. 리스닝을 좀 더 반박 할 수 있는 구체적인 부분들을 더 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다.
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