■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Students are eligible for graduation when they have completed satisfactory all the academic requirements of their degree program as specified by their major departmant, their college, and the university. In addition to the normal requirements, some universities are now considering requiring all students to take public speaking class in order to improve their public speaking skills. Some deem this extra requirement necessary while others have an opposite view. What is your opinion? |
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▶ Your Answer : As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weigh the pros and cons before jumping up to a conclusion. After all, each and every question or topic requires careful deliberation in that there are multiple variables to a truth. Even though some may adamantly believe that taking public speaking class is necessary to university students, I think such opinion lacks coherence to some extent. In my humble opinion, forcing students to take public speaking class has many disadvantages. First and foremost, majority of individuals would agree with the notion that students can improve their speaking skills in other ways. The main reason behind this rationale is that college students already experience several public speaking sessions in high school. Moreover, students in university also have many public speakings in their classes. To illustrate more thoroughly, in Korea, many schools have many debate classes. Teenagers share their opinion about many topics such as politics, economics, and environments. Because teachers supervise students' debate, teens can get feedback from their teachers and correct their mistakes. In addition, teachers usually give points to students who participate in debate very actively or suggest good views, so children partake in discussion and put a lot of effort to make it a good debate. These students already experience public speaking, so they do not need to learn speaking again at university. Additionally, university students also have many opportunities to do public speaking in their classes. Professors usually give assignments that have to make a presentation, so students have to express their opinions or provide information to all students. Thus, students already do enough public speaking and have very good speaking skills. All in all, we can't and shouldn't overlook the fact that students can improve their speaking skills in other ways. On top of this, students have many other things to do, and it is a widely accepted fact in modern society. In the eyes of many people in present day society, students have to get good grade and prepare for job hunting. Besides, students who do not have enough money to pay tuition have to do part time job. A great example of this would be my older sister. When my older sister was in university students, she was really busy and did not have time to play with her friends. She majored in chemistry and she received many tasks. She always slept very late to finish her works and she could not sleep very well when she had exams. Unfortunately, my parents did not give any money to my sister and she had to earn money by herself, so she also had to do part time job in a cafe in order to pay tuition and dormitory fee. Because her major was very difficult, she had to spend a lot of time to study her major. When she became a senior, forth grade students, she started to prepare for her job and became more busy. Therefore, if her school had forced her to take some classes such as speaking classes, she could not have been able to concentrate on those classes and waste time. Long story short, it's clear as day to me that students have many other things to do. In summation, yes, it's virtually impossible to provide a completely satisfying answer to the open-ended question. Although the jury may be out, we can come to mutual agreement that forcing students to take public speaking class has many disadvantages due to reasons and details mentioned above.
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점수: 24/30
1. 철자 오류가 상당히 잦은 편입니다. (파랑색 부분)
감점의 요인이 될 수 있으니 꼼꼼히 검토 후 철자 오류를 수정해주세요.
2. 컴마 사이 yes는 구어체이므로 쓰지 않는 것을 추천드립니다.
3. 문법에서는 관사와 단복수에 약하신 것 같습니다.
a, an, the와 같은 관사의 사용법을 꼼꼼히 보시고
s를 붙여야 하는지 마는지에 대해서도 확실히 알아두시면 좋을 것 같습니다.
4. 분량은 매우 좋습니다. example도 디테일하게 잘 쓰셨습니다.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*