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In my opinion, I agree that teaching students is more important for professors than doing research. there are several reasons supporting it. teaching students is a main goal of a university and professors are hired to achieve the goal by a the university. Professor is a job which is similar with teacher of elementary school, middle school, and high school. They have to give students insight to overlook the whole world so that students can catch what they like to do, what they want to be, what are their life's aims and so on. It is so important for students because they still don't know the world and they have to prepare their future with confidence.
In my case, my professor gave me advice to go other countries to learn what I couldn't imagine. So the next vacation, I went a field trip to a company related in to my major in Finland. In Finland, I could see really amazing technologies and facilities which I had been never ever seen before. It was so impressive for me. After that trip, I decided to study more and go to graduate school. Like this, professors can have a significant effect on students. if professors want to concentrate on doing research than teaching students, they should have been applied to an institution to struggle struggling to find out something new. Professors have to research in an university, but again, a main goal of a university is teaching students. The owners of Universities are students. Universities have to give everything helpful to students. The most of important those is knowledge. Students studied really hard to major what they want to learn more. Therefore they have a right to learn about their major. For this, efforts of professors are necessary.
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