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The lecturer argues that the disadvantages of gather people to a group far outweigh the advantages of it. In other words, to solve the problem, it is not a good way to do with team in many cases people should work in group. This contradicts the reading passage’s claim that the best way to do project is to assemble a group of people into a team.
First, the lecturer maintains that free riders are everywhere. According to reading passage, if number of people gather and do their jobs what they have to, they can use their wider range of knowledge, expertise and skills if and only if they are all cooperative. This counters doubt on the reading passage’s claim that team will have improved abilities than single individuals. (정리가 덜된 느낌입니다. 통합형 에세이에서는 리딩에대한 설명을 하고 바로 리스닝에 대한 반박을 서술하지 리딩에서 리스닝 리스닝에서 리딩으로 가는 구조는 맞지 않습니다)
Second, the lecturer asserts that they do not move faster than individuals. There are long reach consensuses which are cause to make time loses. To solve simple problem, group have has to take many meetings to build agreement among members. And also, during that long time, creative idea that someone suggested can dropped before members discuss it During that time, creative idea can be appeared without group discussing. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s claim that the group can move quickly than individuals and work more creative. in finding out creativity.
Finally, the lecturer points out that there are just disappointed feeling to influential people, and no chances to “shine” for members. If influential people‘s decision leads the group to wrong way, there are no breaks to stop that. Some of wrong choice of influential people can make the group less flexible. This refutes doubt on the reading passage’s claim that the leader of the group can feel better and the individual tam member has a much better chance to “shine"
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