■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Volunteer work should be mandatory for college students. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. |
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▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that volunteer work don’t have to be duty for college students. However, in my opinion, it is essential to regard volunteer work as a responsibility of students for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, students can learn more about the community where they live. They can understand their town and communities who live nearby them. For example, I studied far from my hometown and I don’t have really much time to interact with village people nearby. But after doing volunteer work in village hall for several days, most of them greeted me with smile when I visited their shop and restaurant. It can seem to be very small thing, but actually it is huge movement for me. After I returned to my hometown, and I did volunteer work again in hospital. I really enjoy being friends with village people to understand my town and community. This experience shows that volunteer work (especially in a public) leads us to understand more about the community and country.
On top of that, volunteer job leads student to learn the meaning of helping others in general. Most of the volunteer work that college students can do is helping other people in public services such as big hospital, city hall, nursing home (for old people), and orphanage in their town. According to Chung Ang Il bo, which is the famous newspaper in South Korea, 77.6% of the students who volunteered in public service felt pleasure that they helped someone else who are not able to live without assistance and proud of themselves for their jobs.
In conclusion, learning about their community and town and finding the meaning of helping others are the most beneficial factors for students to do volunteer jobs, and therefore college have to make volunteer work mandatory.
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