▶ Your Answer : Some argue that telling the truth is the
most important factor to keep the good relationship. However, I believe in some
cases, telling white lies is necessary and showing compassion is the most important
consideration in the relationship.for the following two subsequent reasons.
To begin with, the truth can be hurting hurt people.
Sometimes, people find it difficult to accept the truth, and especially if
nothing can be done to improve the reality, it might be better for their mental
and physical health not to know the truth (이 부분을 통하여서 무슨 말을 전달하려고 하는 것인지 이해가 되지 않습니다). I have personal experience that I
did not enjoy hearing the truth from my friend, which influenced our friendship
in the negative way. One For example, one day I wore a new dress I bought, and asked my friend
how it was. She told me honestly that she did not like it and it didn’t suit me
well. She added that maybe the problem was not the dress but my appearance and
suggested getting a plastic surgery. She might have been trying to be honest
with me as a true friend, wishing the best for me. However, I was shocked and
sad to hear the truth. Even though I knew that her intention was not to hurt my
feelings, I was unhappy about her remarks and our friendship was not the same
as before. Admittedly, telling the truth can be crucial factor in the
relationship, but one should carefully consider if it is the right situation to
do so.
In addition, I think showing compassion is
more important in the relationship than telling the truth. Often people feel
comforts when their friends or families agree with them and show compassion. What
human beings need when they are in trouble is compassion, and not hearing the
truth or advice from others. According to the survey conducted by the Kakao,
about 70 per cent of respondents preferred to receive compassions and absolute
agreements from their friends and families when they are going through a hard
time, instead of hearing the truth or the advices.
To sum up, I believe telling white lies if
necessary, and showing compassions are the most crucial considerations in order
to keep the good relationship. 점수: 21 일단 전체적으로 설명이 좀 부족한 거 같아요. 첫 번째 단락 같은 경우는 너무 불필요한 설명들 때문에 본질을 흐리게 되었지만 두 번째 단락 같은 경우는 compassion이 가장 중요하다고 설명하고는 있는데 이 compassion이 무엇에 대한 건지에 대한 구체적인 설명이 너무 없는 거 같습니다. 따라서 이 단락을 통해서 무엇을 말하고자 하는 거지라는 의문을 들게 하는 거 같습니다. 이 부분을 숙지하면서 에세이를 서술하시길 바랍니다. 수고많으셨습니다. 정말 감사드려용 <3
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