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Some people might argue that all university students should be required to take at least one class that teaches the culture of a foreign country while others think differently. Both sides may have their own reasons. If I had to choose one, I would say that it cannot be mandatory for the students to take one class in which students learn the foreign country's culture for the following two subsequent reasons. To begin with, all university students have the right to choose which lecture to learn. They chose their major by themselves and pay the tuition to learn what they want to study. Registering for courses is their own responsibility responsibilities. For example, Yonsei university I attended announced that all the students had to take the class, the principles of economy. According to the student union’s article, 87% of respondents of the poll targeting its students asserted that they were not happy with the university’s decision. They contended that the main reason why they entered the university was that they would study deeper in courses what they wanted. Fortunately, the university withdrew the announcement to require all students to take the economy class. Furthermore, students do not have enough time to take a non-major course. As industry has become specialized, modern job markets require job candidates with expertise in at least more than one particular area. Therefore, to build dominance in competition between graduates, undergraduates should spend as much time as they can in developing their specific major. For example, when my youngest sister was in college, she failed in job interviews several times. In the job interview, she heard that it is more significant for students to have expertise in one particular area rather than to know broadly. Since then, she spent the whole day studying accounting. Naturally, she showed her own specialty in accounting and a stronger confidence in it, and she got the job in a large company. If she had studied non-major classes in school, she would not found the job. In a nutshell, students should be allowed to take courses in what they want. On top of that, they should not spend valuable time in studying other majors, such as class relevant to the culture of a foreign country. All things considered, university should not require students to take one particular class.
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