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As the importance of work-life balance is getting bigger nowadays, people look for various ways to enjoy their lives. Among them, reading books and watching movies are very popular and easy ways to enjoy our time, however, the preference between the former and the latter depends on the individual (자주 쓰이는 표현이므로 익혀두세요.) people. I personally think that reading is more enjoyable than watching movies for the following subsequent reasons.
To begin with, reading greatly stimulates our imagination greatly. While reading, people naturally keep imagining many things about the stories, such as the features of characters (이런 식으로 `사용을 피해주시면 됩니다.) characters’ features, background images, and even senses of sound and taste. The constant process enables people to use our lively imagination and enjoy the time much more, which is especially good for children because it is helpful for their creativity. When watching movies, on the other hand, people’s imagination is restricted by scenes made in the film even if movies show something exciting using high technology. For instance, I pictured many scenes and really enjoyed when reading Harry Potter series at an early age, but afterward, when I watched the movie, I felt like it limited my infinite imagination, and it was not enjoyable as much as I felt when I read the books.
Secondly, we can actively take lead of our pace when reading books. All people have a different pace in terms of reading and watching movies. Some want to keep their pace slow, (이따가 총평에서 쉼표에 관해서 말씀드릴 건데, 여기는 반대로 쉼표가 꼭 있어야 합니다.) thinking about stories and underlying meanings, whereas others might prefer a fast pace. Movies have limited hours regardless of our pace, and we become passive beings by following movies’ pace, whereas reading makes us active beings as we control the pace by ourselves without time limit. For example, it takes a pretty long time for me to read books because I tend to appreciate every moment of the story stories and try to find the authors’ intention and hidden meanings, but watching movies is impossible to think about those so prevents me from enjoying stories.
To sum up, I prefer reading (비교 대상도 적어주세요.) because it helps us exercise our imagination and keep our pace. The two aspects are very important so that we can enjoy its stories. From old times, reading is considered as the best way to grow the ability of thinking and be wise. I believe that we need to devote time to be relaxed reading in the modern society that everything goes fast.
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