■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic :
Comprehending the past is crucial to being able to tackle obstacles
facing us now and in the future.
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▶ Your Answer :
There are some people who might say that the understanding of the past is important to solving difficulties facing them now and in the future. However, I personally believe that people should know the history to be able to deal with obstacles in their lives.
To begin with, people won’t make the same mistakes. To explain, by learning the past, a person can be aware of the reasons why a lot of failures occurred. The understanding of reasons will cause people to try something in a different way. For example, due to mid-term exams from last semester, I studied all subjects by understanding concepts I learned from classes. Since I took many classes and there was too much to memorize, I didn’t thoroughly cram all the things into my head. Because I totally forgot what I had learned when I took exams, my mid-term scores were low. After then, for final exams, I tried hard to memorize as much as I could. As a result, I could get much higher grades. (이 paragraph에서 example이 차지하는 비율이 너무 높습니다. 예시의 분량을 줄이시든지, 예시 뒤에 추가 설명을 덧붙여주세요.)
On top of that, people can foresee the future. To be specific, history repeats itself. From similar events in the past, people can calculate possibilities of results briefly. For instance, in a study implemented in 2015 by the National Fashion Institute, researchers found out that there was a recurring cycle found in the fashion history. They said that many trendy styles and items in 2015 were also trendy 30 years ago. Also, they asserted that several items such as hair bands, vivid coloured clothes, and wide pants would become popular in 2018, and it was exactly right. Last year, many people wore bright green t-shirts, hair bands with a variety of styles.
In conclusion, to stop making the same mistakes and foresee the future, people should comprehend the past. In this regard, apprehending the past is a great way to cope with problems people will face in the future. |
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