■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies tell a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. |
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▶ Your Answer : I totally agree with the statement that movies tell a lot
about a country. Actually, I am one of the movie manias among my friends. I go
to see a movie at least once a month. I’m very open to all the genres. Of the
movies that I’ve ever seen, a movie (Which movie is it? Maybe mention the title of it?) was really impressive, which describes a
woman living in Paris. In the movie, I could learn lots of things about France.
So now, I’ll give you reasons to support my answer. One reason is that there are various places on a movie. Once characters
go to a city in a country on the movie, the place will be very famous. For
example, I saw a movie, ‘Eat, Pray, Love’ before. The setting of the movie is
mostly in Italy. A woman in the movie decided to go to Italy to start her new
life. In the movie, she went around many places in Rome, so the viewers of the
movie seem to travel feel like traveling to Italy only on the screen without going there in person.
I think it is the second experience. Even though they don’t fly to Italy, they can
learn and see most about the country.
Another reason is about a historical movie.
Anybody has experiences to see historical movies. Historical movie can also be
one of the reasons of the statement. Historical movie has lots of information
about a country. They show certain historical events from movies so viewers can
learn a part of history in a country. (Where is your example? 어떤 historical events를 보여주는지 example이 없습니다)
In conclusion, movies tell much about a certain
country through the reasons and examples that I mentioned. Movies reflect a few
parts of our lives and show how we live in a town, city and country. Therefore,
I have no doubt movies tell a lot about a country and even our lives. |
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1. 동어 반복이 많이 심한 편입니다.
movie, country 특히 이 두 반어가 계속적으로 반복되는데
지루한 느낌을 줄 수 있으니 film, nation 같은 대체어/유의어를 많이 활용해주세요.
2. body paragraph의 길이가 많이 짧은 편입니다. 인트로와 거의 비슷한걸 확인하실 수 있습니다.
detail을 충분히 늘려주세요.
수고하셨습니다. *^^*