■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer
▶ Topic :
Volunteer work should be mandatory for college students
▶ Your Answer :
These days, university students do a wide variety of extracurricular activities. Some college students mentor elementary school students and others do volunteer works. Some people argue that volunteer works should be mandatory because it can help student to learn a lot of lessons. However, in my opinion, volunteer work should not be mandatory for them. There are two subsequent reasons for this.
First and foremost, some students would not learn many things by doing mandatory volunteer works. To be specific, there must be some college students who do not want to use their valuable time on volunteering. If those students are forced to do volunteer works, they would not feel or learn anything during volunteer works. It would be meaningless if those students can not feel any sense of accomplishment. For example, when I was a university student, my school required all students to do volunteer work at least for 50 hours in a semester. At that time, I volunteered at the nursing home and it was really stressful. I could not feel any sense of fulfillment and I could not understand why I had to do this work spending my time. As this case reveals, mandatory volunteer works will not be beneficial for students who do not want to do volunteer works. (어떤 종류의 워크였는지 자세하게 써주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다.)
On top of that, college students in these days have to focus on studying rather than volunteering. To explain, university students are experiencing fierce competitions for jobs and grades. In order to graduate from schools, they need to pour a lot of efforts into studying. If they have to spend their time on volunteer works, it would be difficult for them to pour all of their energy into their studying. There is a case which can elucidate my point. There was a college in my town. In order to encourage students to contribute to local community, the school decided to require a minimum of 3 hours of volunteer works from all students. After implementing the new policy, the overall academic performance dropped significantly. The main reason was that the college students were not able to spend their time on studying. Majority of students complained that the volunteer work is a big burden for them. If the school had not required students to do volunteer work, the students would have been able to focus on their studying.
To sum up, mandatory volunteer works can be meaningless for students who do not want to do. Moreover, it is better for university students to put their efforts into studying rather than volunteering. For these reasons, I firmly believe that volunteer works should not be mandatory for university students.
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