■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words.
■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer
▶ Topic :
People learn things better from those at their own level -such as fellow students or co-workers- than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
▶ Your Answer :
Some people believes that it is better to get advice from teachers or seniors who are older and have much more experiences than themselves. However, I think people can learn better when they talk with classmates or colleagues rather than teachers or bosses. There are two subsequent reasons for this.
First and foremost, a person can feel comfortable being with close friends or coworkers. To be specific, since they spend a lot of time in schools and workplaces with them, they are close to each other and have lots of time to talk to one another. On the other hand, teachers or seniors are usually rigid and strict. When a student or an employee made a mistake, they have to reprimand them. For these reasons, most people feel uncomfortable being with them and feel a distance from them. There was a survey which was conducted by a group of business majors with 300 office workers. The survey questions were about their seniors and bosses in their workplaces. More than 65 percent of respondents replied that they can not learn many things (many + 복수명사) from their bosses. The main reason was that they felt uncomfortable when they spend time with their bosses so they could not pay attention to learning something even though their bosses are trying to teach them.
On top of that, colleagues and fellow students can teach better than teachers or supervisors. To explain, they usually are in the same age and they experienced similar things throughout their lives. For these reasons, they can explain complex concepts or knowledge in a way which young people can understand better. However, a person can feel an intergenrational (무슨 뜻인가요?) gap from a supervisor or a teacher because most of them are usually older than them and have different life experience. I will talk about my personal experience as an example. When I was a high school student, I had a difficulty in learning computer skills and asked my teachers. My teacher could not understand why I am having a difficulty using a computer. I could not learn anything from her and asked one of my close classmates for help. She explained how to use a computer and taught me how to use word processing. If I had not asked my friend for help, I would have had a trouble in using computer even after being taught from my teacher.
To sum up, people can feel uncomfortable being with their teachers and supervisors. Moreover, people whose ages are similar to each other can teach better than them. For these reasons, I firmly believe that it is better being taught from people like fellow students or coworkers rather than teachers or supervisors.
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