▶ Your Answer :
Some people think that moving to a new city
or country is not a good idea because they will lose their old friends.
However, I disagree with that statement. This is because we can easily keep in
touch with our friends using internet and the distance is not the most important
thing in friendship.
First
of all, as the internet is developed, we can communicate with friends without
any difficulties wherever they live. Actually, about 40 millions of people in
Korea communicate with other people using SNS like Instagram, Facebook or Kakaotalk.
We can keep in touch with friends continuously by sharing our daily life or
chatting on the SNS. Besides, because of fast internet speed, even if we are in
other countries we can call on the phone to friends and talk with them easily. In
21 centry, the distance is not an important factor in relationship anymore.
Second,
in old friendship, the distance is not a matter. The reason we could be an old
friends to someone is that we are on the same wavelength. Old friends are similar
to like shelters where we can share good news or bad news whenever we want even if we
can’t meet actually. see each other eye to eye. For example, I recently moved to Seoul because of university and my
old friends also moved to other cities, but we are the best friends for us, so
we share any hard things that occur during school life and feel comfortable.
To
sum up, fast internet speed and feeling comfortable are the bigger issues than far
distance. In this regard, I strongly believe that old friendship will keep
going regardless of how far we are
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