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The fifth edition of Avengers, An End Game, brought in more than ten million dollars in ticket sales in Korea. AS a huge fan of marvel series, I watched film five times in the theater. After watching it several times, I felt I was more informed about American culture; I could view a landscape of New skyscrapers and their lifestyles. Film reflected diverse features about a country, so if the audience pay a little attention to its surroundings, they can easily notice some cultural factors that are embedded in it. Thus, I believe movies tell a lot about a country for the following reasons. (introduction 이 너무 깁니다. 어느정도는 새 paragraph에 적어도 좋을 만 한거 같아요) To begin with, movies show a variety of culture regarding a country. The audience may learn about its lifestyle by watching what actors eat in film, where they live and be informed about overall life patterns. Most importantly, which languages actors and actresses use, may tell a lot about people's values. For example, filial piety and respect for the elderly is prevalent in Korea. People are considered rude if they behave impolitely to the elderly. Thus, in Korean movies, one can easily notice that the young bows to the old when they first meet. Also, Korean has polite expressions for superiors. Korean movies imply these unique characteristics. In addition, historical facts about a country are sometimes of great importance in understanding the overall plot of the movies. Many historical movies and political movies can be properly understood only if the audience have enough background information about the history of a country. For instance, Koreans are often somewhat hostile towards Japan, while amicable to Americans. If the audience are not aware of Korean history, they will find these manners very awkward. However, if they are informed about the fact that U.S aided Korea during Korean War or that Korea was once colonized and severely mistreated by Japan, they may understand why Koreans often express such attitudes toward Americans and Japanese. In this respect, movies sometimes can be a great history textbook. To sum up, I believe movies are not only enjoyable entertainment but also educational textbook. Movies offer a great opportunity for the viewers to thumb through culture and history of that country.
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