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Word
alone cannot express the importance of environment. One should not, however,
fall prey to the misconception that the condition of the environment will get
better in the future. I, therefore, strongly believe that, in the following
years, the natural environment will get worse than nowadays. There are two
reasons that underscore the validity of this statement.
Firstly,
it is true that, in many countries, illegal activities have happened
publicly. These activities include the cutting too much trees in Africa to
make paper, catching endangered rare whales in Japan to
eat quality raw food, filling up huge mud flat to expand national
territory and firing trashes to reduce their national waste, etc. Most of
people already know the problematic environmental condition in these days.
Also, UWNE, union of world national environmental, warned to the leaders of
many countries for this situation. On the other hand, some countries keep their
bad actives and businesses to get more money, and some people keep their
working secretly to live their life more convenient. I believe that small
actions make bigger changes. If we do not change our attitude for environment,
I am sure that environmental condition will get worse in the future.
Secondly,
according to the recent research, large amount of plastic material is used in
all of the world. We can easily find plastic one-use disposable products
in various places such as fast food stores, markets, coffee shops, etc. Nowadays,
an attempt to solve the huge problem, some governments regulate the law that
every shop have to use paper cups, paper straw and paper dishes. These
laws were also administered in my country from the last year. Ministry
of the Korea Environmental have observed the situation of the law enforcement
and it is going well. Although all of the nation follow the law fortunately,
the environment can never get back to original condition. This is because,
through the few centuries, the Earth have been destructed due to
many factors that I mentioned first paragraph. Only by devising new
regulations is the way to maintain the state of the current environmental
condition, not to get better.
As I
mentioned above, environment condition will get worse. The importance of
environment can never overestimated in our society. I think, only if all people
take sincerely care our environment, just keep our condition of
environment like now. So I would not think twice before choosing to this
opinion and helping our environment to get better.