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Words
alone cannot express the importance of higher education. One should not,
however, fall prey to the misconception that parents in the past have more involvement
about their children’s education. I, therefore, strongly believe that interests
of parents on children’s education have been increased in modern society. There
are two reasons that underscore the validity of this statement. Firstly, these days, whereas power of public
education was decreasing, power of private education was increasing. This is
because there are only few private academic institutes in the past. So there is very little difference in the education
quality among students, because most of students can get only the public
education. However, really many number of private academic institutes
spread around us, even in the rural city. For these circumstances, competition
of getting grade is higher. The quality
of private education has been
considered as important factor for getting difference among other students. Thus,
parent's information about good private academic institutes is a really
critical issue among parents and students. As I mentioned above, these days,
parents want to take more care their children about education than the
past. Secondly, in the past, most of people
including students focus on making money rather than studying. When my mother
was young, my country, South Korea, was really poor and developing country.
This is because my country experienced a big war called Korean War. So, people
were living a poor life with deficient materials and lack of foods. In
these severe situations, it is not easy for students to study without
any disturbance. Especially, in the past, most of people were engaged in agriculture.
It means that they need more workforce.
Parents and children are usually work all day to get many harvests and
to get more money. As my mother’s experience illustrates, my country’s people
in the past can never consider their education or their children’s education unlike my country’s current situation.
As I mentioned above, nowadays, parents have a
huge level of involvement in the education of their children than before. The
importance of getting education in our society can never be overestimated. So I
would like to urge people to wake from the illusion that parents are more
involved in their children’s education in the past. I would not think twice
before choosing to do so.
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