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As online lessons taught by professors from
prestigious universities and institutes became increasingly popular, people
believe that such ways are the most effective to learn knowledge. However, I
prefer to learn from colleagues and classmates, as they are more approachable
and could identify the difficulty on my level.
To begin with, I can ask questions to
co-workers or fellow pupils more freely without concerns. Since we are almost
on the same level, I would not be afraid of raising whatever questions that
came up to my mind.약간 문장이 가볍게 느껴지는 편입니다. (구어체같이) 토플은 formal한 쪽에 가깝다는 것을 항상 기억하여 조금 더 무게 있게 적는 게 좋습니다. Otherwise, I will be anxious to know whether the question
will make me look incompetent in front of my boss or instructor. For example, I
once asked my accounting teacher about the difference between asset and equity,
which made her question my ability to just read the textbook without offering
any answer. 이러한 예시를 쓸 때는 선생님이 잘 도아주지 않았다, 보다는 뒤에 나오는 스터디 그룹했더니 잘되었다. 여기에 더 큰 초점을 맞추어 적는 게 좋습니다. (뒤 부분이 더 길게 나오는 게 좋습니다) Later, only when I resorted to my study group for help did I
realize that it's a common question among students and can be illustrated by
examples and cases. My fellow study group members were of much help rather than
the lecturer.
On top of that, people at my own level know
how to resolve problems more easily, as they have been there too. Teachers and
leaders know the resolutions so well that they sometimes do not know what the
underlying problem is. Meanwhile, fellow students all went through the same
mental process while learning, they are better at identifying the true
obstacles. For instance, my friend Cathy could not ride a bicycle. No matter
how hard our physical education teacher tried by explaining the mechanism and
showing her the standard gesture, she could not maintain the balance.
Therefore, I suggested that she slide on the bike first to become familiar with
the bike and sit still on the seat without moving, since this is how I learned.
As a result, she picked up the skill immediately.
To conclude, it is more effective to learn
from friends and co-workers, as we can approach them more freely, and they are
more compassionate about the difficulties we are facing. In this regard, I
agree with the statement that one can learn better when they ask people at
their level. 다 괜찮은데 introduction에서 hook가 한번 나오면 좋을 것 같아요. 질문 형식도 괜찮습니다.
뭐랄까 항상 그냥 factual한 문장으로 시작하다보니 조금 아쉬운 것 같아요. 어휘가 조금 아쉬운 편입니다. so well 이런 어휘 사용은 약간씩 줄여가는 게 좋을 것 같아요. (이와 같은 동의어가 정말 많은 편이니 복습 더 하는 걸 추천드립니다) |
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