▶ Your Answer : By developing the quality of education, nowadays, many people can have a chance to become an expert or getting to get a good job opportunities. However, there are pros and cons about giving to give an opportunity to have an higher education to all students or only to good students. I think that good educations such as college or university educations should be available to all students. There are several reasons.
First of all, everyone should be given equal opportunities. Regardless of sincerity , responsibility or one's capability, doors of educations should be always opened. To be specific, I think that giving an opportunity to have an higher educations only to smart students is as same as giving an opportunities only to rich peoples. Most of us live in democratic societies, and it is considered fair and reasonable to having an fair opportunities to have an access to university educations. (Unclear point) (Need conclusion)
Second, diversity improves an understanding of life. There are different kinds of people in the modern world. For example, having an team assignments of education can obtain good results than having an assignments individually because diversity of thinking often leads to better ideas. (Awkward sentence) In university, professors sometimes give an hard assignments based on class contents. And when a class has an team play, (What is it?) we can understand hard contents better than studying on their own. Like that, When the university education is available to everybody, this can lead to more clear understanding and ideas, and these can make synergy to everybody.
Conclusionally, In conclusion, opportunities of higher educations are already equal in many parts, because these are reasonable things. (Why reasonable?) And also diversity is important factor in educations regardless of gender, race, or age.
For these reasons, I agree to the opinion that university education should be available to all students.
채점기준표 | Grammar | Contents | Example | Coherence | 점수 | 2 | 2 | 2 | 2 | Score | Limited 10-17 |
- people 자체가 복수형을 가지고 있기 때문에 -s를 또한 붙이지 않습니다. - hard contents, team play가 시사하는 바는 무엇인가요? 또한 이 점이 diversity라는 주장과 어떤 상관관계가 있나요? - 잘못된 capital word 사용에 유의하여 주세요. - 어색한 문장들이 많이 보이는 편입니다. |
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