■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer |
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▶ Topic : Some people think that parents should spend a lot of time playing games or sports with their children. Others think that parents should devote more time to doing school with them. Which do you think is better?
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▶ Your Answer :
Unquestionably, parents play a significant role in children's lives in many of the places where they study or play. A large number of people think that parents should devote more time to doing schoolwork with their children, while others think that parents should spend a lot of time playing games or sports with them. Both sides may have their own reasons to support their views. If I were asked to choose one, I would say that parents have to spend a lot of time playing recreational activities with their children. There are several reasons as follows.
Above all, when parents spend their time playing recreational activities with their children, children are likely to improve their academic performance. It provides them more chances to relax and recharge their batteries. When children are recharged, they tend to bring a better result in school. For example, when my youngest brother was in elementary school, he often felt depressed thinking that his life became an exhausting routine. To survive in competitive classes, he spent the whole day studying all academic subjects, hoping that he could outdo others. Moreover, at family dinner, he was busy discussing his academic assignments with our parents. Even though he made a constant effort, it was not easy because all of his classmates were working as hard as he was. Fortunately, he was able to overcome his depression by spending break time playing tennis with his father and playing computer games with his mother. By doing this, he was able to let off some steam and alleviate his stress. Surprisingly, he showed characteristics of a longer attention span, a stronger passion for his tasks, and a better ability to delay gratification. Naturally, he was able to excel all throughout high school, received straight A's in his classes, and be more confident about himself. If my parent had just spent their time doing schoolwork with him, he would not have been able to escape from depression and would still have been fallen behind.
In brief, I strongly believe that the advantages of spending parents' time playing exciting activities with their children far outweigh those of doing school assignments with them for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, the importance of recharging cannot be overestimated in life. |
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