◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- professor에서 [f]발음을 정확하게 해주세요
- live의 [v]발음을 정확하게 해주시고 한 개의 음절로 발음해주세요.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- to explain topic
-> to explain the/this topic
- need to raise their youngers
-> need to raise their young
- are live in
-> are living in
- so it is the best place to raise their young in the wetland
-> so wetland is the best place to raise their young / so it is best to rise their young in the wetland
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- So it is the best place to raise their young in the wetland 다음에 wetland is .. 로 새 문장으로 연결하는 것보다 since/as 로 두 문장을 연결해주시면 흐름상 더 좋을 것 같습니다.
- similar to their home부분은 설명이 더 필요해보입니다.
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