17. Name a person whom you truly admire. Describe the person and say why you admire him/her.
◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- 수정 사항 없습니다
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- my family had economical difficulty long time ago
→ My family had economic difficulties long time ago
- tried to make the circumstance better
→ 조금 어색한 표현입니다.
- because of my father's effort
→ because of my father's efforts
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 최대한 45초를 다 써주세요.
- The person I truly admire is my father 다음에 my family had economic difficulty ..가 나오는데 흐름이 조금 끊기는 느낌이었어요. The reason why I admire my father is because when my family had economic difficulties long ago, he tried his best to ... 이런식으로 해주시는 것이 더 자연스러울 것 같아요.
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