2. Some people believe it is better to get a university education after graduating high school. Others believe getting a job after high school is better. Which do you think is better and why?
I think going to attending the university after graduating a high school is better than getting a job after high school graduation. (There are several/two reasons why)
First, I can have a chance to learn about the world systemically. For example, I was majoring in a business major. Thanks to my major, I was able to figure out the international trade that was addressed by the professor. It helps me to understand the world better. (Very awkward sentence)
--> In this case, subject should be the professor, saying like: the professor in my major offered professional knowledge about business field.
Second, I can meet many people who have various backgrounds. For example, when I was in the university, I was surrounded by many foreigners. Before meeting them, I used to have some stereotypes about foreign culture. (Like what?) But after hanging out with them, I could get to know the real aspects of foreign culture.
For these reasons, I think going to the university is a better choice.
* I 자체가 major가 될 수는 없겠죠. 틀린 문법에 더욱 신경써주세요.
두 번재 내용에서는 surrounded보다는 구체적으로 어떤 대학을 가고, 어떤 외국인을 만나고 어떤계기를 통해 well aware of culture가 되었는지 순차적으로 설명해주셔야 합니다.