◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- and play game and chat ______ 빈 칸 단어의 발음을 조금 더 정확하게 발음해주세요.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- and play game and chat live (?)
-> and play games and chat online
- I do not have to worry about complicated things such as worrying about my boss or coworkers ..
-> worrying about someone(사람) "누군가를 걱정하다" 라는 뜻입니다.
-> such as worrying that I'll miss important messages from my boss or coworkers
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- cell phone의 feature + 왜 필요한지에 대한 설명을 하신 것 같습니다. cell phones를 항상 갖고 다녀야 하는 이유에 대한 설명이 되게끔 조금 더 깊이 파고들어가주시면 좋겠습니다. If I have some spare time outside home, for example, when I am waiting for my friend to come, I can quickly take out my phone and entertain myself by playing mobile games.
◆ Comments
- worrying about someone 표현 쓰실 때 조심해주세요.
- 조금 더 주제에 맞춰 설명해주세요.
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