◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- 수정 사항 없습니다.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
I want to travel to India
First, I would have the chance to eat delicious local foods such as 커리
In detail, Eating delicious foods is one of my favorite hobbies, and whenever I eat the foods, I become so happy.
second, It can be enjoyable because there is great sightseeing such as 타지마할
To be specific, Time will pass very quickly when I concentrate on seeing the great landscape, since I can just enjoy the moment
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 설명도 인도나 여행에 맞춰서 해주시면 더 좋을 것 같습니다.
-> trying foreign food is one of my favorite hobbies
- I can just enjoy the moment 부분은 sightseeing에 대한 설명으로 부족한 것 같습니다.
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