2.Describe two cities you have visited. Explain the differences between them.
◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- 수정 사항 없습니다.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- California is most beautiful place that I have ever visit
-> California is the most beautiful place that I have ever visited
- It has so many people
-> There are so many people there.
- broaden my perspective in the New York's people
-> 어색한 표현입니다.
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 질문은 두 도시를 '비교'해달라고 하고 있습니다. Conversely, Compared to A, B is ~. Unlike A, B is ~ 이런식의 표현이 굉장히 많이 등장해야해요.
- 비교를 요구하고 있기 때문에 'is the most beautiful city I have ever visited', 'I think it contains both man-made and natural beauty'로 캘리포니아를 묘사하셨는데 뉴욕은 not so beautiful - there are so many people로 설명을 하셔서 비교가 잘 되지 않은 것 같아요. There are not many people and the city is very calm <-> The city is crowded and busy all the time. 이런식으로 비교가 확실하게끔 설명을 해주셔야 합니다.
- 'It is the most beautiful city I have ever visited', 'It is simply unforgettable for me', 'could get an opportunity to socialize with various people' - 모두 불필요한 문장입니다. 오로지 두 도시를 비교하는데에만 초점을 맞춰주세요.
◆ Comments
- 질문이 요구하는 것에 맞게 답을 구성해주세요.
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