◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- advantages 발음 정확하게 해주세요.
- 전체적으로 발음이 많이 뭉치고 있습니다. There are many advantages doing so let me explain my ~ 이부분이 특히 많이 심해요. There are many advantages of doing so. (break) Let me explain , 이렇게 해주세요.
다음 문장들에서 빈칸 부분의 단어들 발음이 모두 부정확합니다.
- if my friend is trying to get a job, I would ____ my friend to ~ (단어가 say 이면 'say to'라고 꼭 해주셔야 합니다)
- last semester I ___ time
- I read ____ about a job
* 전체적으로 발음이 뭉치지 않게 더 또박또박 발음해주셔야 할 것 같아요. 무엇보다 속도가 살짝 빠릅니다.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
- personal experience as example
→ personal experience as an example
- so I join a study group
→ so I joined a study group
- they are always there for me
→ they가 여기서 누군지 알 수 없습니다 - 받는 사람들이 앞 내용에 나오지 않았습니다. The study group members were always there for me.
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 조금 더 organized 되게끔 해주세요.
- 제시하신 이유들은 적절하나 설명이 부족합니다
- I would advise my friend to join a study group. There are two advantages of joining a study group. First, she will be able to get a lot of information. (그리고 이 인포메이션이 뭔지에 대한 설명도 넣어주세요. For example, she will be able to share valuable tips on how to do well for interviews with the study members. Secondly, she will be able to get emotional support as well. I know this from my personal experience. When I was going through a hard time last semester, my study members were always there for me and cheered me up. Thanks to their support, I was able to gain motivation again. For these reasons, I would tell my friend to join a study group.
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