◆ Delivery (Pronunciation and Intonation)
- encourage 발음이 부정확합니다. -cour- 부분 강조가 필요합니다.
- 말씀하시는 속도를 조금 줄여주시고 쉼표나 마침표 표현을 pause로 확실하게 해주세요.
◆ Language Use (Grammar and Vocabulary)
According to the reading, a token reward system is a strategy to encourage desirable behavior. In the lecture, the professor further explains it by giving specific examples of it.
First, he explains that patients from a local drug center were not following the rules, and that the a solution was needed. According to the professor, patients who behaved well could get more time to talk on the phone. However, some of the patients didn’t care much about talking on the phone, so their behavior did not improved very much.
Second, he explains that he made a new policy of token system. Patients who behaved well for a day can get a token and the token could can be exchanged as other rewards. Now, the patients have better incentives, so their behavior will improve improved.
Therefore, the lecture explains the concept with further details.
◆ Topic Development (Contents)
- 강의를 잘 이해하신 것 같으나 전체적으로 설명이 굉장히 simple한 표현들로만 진행되고 있어 아쉽습니다. 조금 더 complex한 문장을 써주세요.
- 강의의 내용을 더 명확하게 요약해주셔야 할 것 같습니다.
◆ Comments
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