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┼ ▨ 푸른소나무님 .. 한번 봐주세요~ - 나나 ┼
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│ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person's childhood years (the time from birth to twelve years of age) are the most important years of a person s life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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│ It is interesting to talk about the statement that A person s(=> a person's) childhood years (the time from birth to twelve years of age) are the most important years of a person s life. Some people agree with the statement while others disagree with the statement. In my opinion, I agree with the statement because during these years we learn about relationships (=> human relationships ) and our language ability.
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│ First of all, the early years of our life are the time when we learn about human relationships. First we learn about our parents and siblings. through their basic relationships, we could learn how to respond to other people. If I and my parents are loved, then we know how to love others. If we are treated harshly, we may grow up to treat others hardly. We also form the idea about our own self-worth from the way others treat us(=> 생략) during these years. (It is possible that) They(=> they) can convince us we are worthless, or they can teach us we deserve love and respect.
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│ Secondly, when (=>in) childhood, we learn fundamental language ability. It is very important to form basic language ability and habits because whenever we do something, we might use language. Generally, it is believed that it is so difficult to change the language ability and habits formed by us(=> during the early childhood.) For example, my mother was born in Je-Ju island, a part of Korea, and lived in there during 6 years. She still speak language of Je-Ju island although living(=> she has been living ) in Seoul during over 40 years. Thus
│ the childhood when basic language ability and habits is formed is the significant period.
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│ In conclusion, it is reasonable that the early years of our life are the most important years of a person s life. There are two reasons for this: during these season we could learn relationships and our basic language skills and habits are formed.
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