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│ #111 some people prefer to spend time with one or two close friends. Others choose to spend time with a large number of friends. compare the advantages of each choices. Which of these two ways of spending time do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your andswer.
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│ It is needless to say that friends are inevitable and important in our life. Some people say that they prefer to spend time with one or two close friends, while others prefer to spend their time with a large number of friends. In my point of view, I prefer to have a time with my closest friend because in small number of the friends, we can (=> small number friends enable us to) share our secret and we can build a deeper relationship.
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│ first, If some people spend their time with a large number of friends, They can meet various kinds of people and can get a lot of advise(=> various kinds of advices) from friends. For instance, one of my friends of mine had a serious problem and want to take some advise from a lot of his friend. Most of the friends give advise and among that advise(=> those advices), friend of mine can choose a best way to solve the problem.
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│ sencond, If some people spend their time with one or two close friends, they can share their secret things and can get a more deeper relationship between them. for example, I once had a troble which was shame to me. I don't want let anyone know about my case but I need some help to solve the problem. So I confess my troble to my best friend and I can get a really helpful advice because ny best friend thought in my situation. After that case, we can build a closer relationship (than) ever before.
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┼ In conclusion, I prefer to spend a time with few close friend because it can give us secreet sharing and deeper interaction. If we can make friends who can give us a advise and knowledge, It can be a happiness in our life. ┼