■ Direction You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. You response will be judge on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words. ■ Question Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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▶ Topic : Reasons for sleep |
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▶ Your Answer :
The reading passage contends that there are
three theories which explain why people sleep. However, the lecturer brings up
several points that contradict this argument.
First of all, the lecturer insists that the
positive impact of REM sleep for people’s memory function has not been proven
although sleeping improves people’s memory function. This is because
experiments show that people who got no or rarely REM sleep still had good
memories. This rebuffs the reading passage’s assertion that getting REM sleep enriches
people’s cognitive abilities.
Second, the speaker admits that getting
sleep contribute for ill or injured people to restore their bodies. However,
the speaker points out that people cannot eat foods when they sleep. Therefore,
people cannot build up energies in their body. Practically, people eat immediately
when they get up in the morning since they lost their energy during last night.
As a result, it is only true that people’s useless energy go away when they
sleep. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s explanation that people can rejuvenate
by sleeping since they save their energy while they sleep.
Last, the speaker indicates that everyone
does not have same amount of poison. This is due to the fact that people’s
bodies absorb different amount of toxin. Furthermore, in the experiment, subjects
were deprived sleep during several days and then they slept in longer period
than normal. Afterward, those people’s noxious matters levels are lower rather
than normal. Hence, the result of experiment is inconclusive. In the end, more clear
researches are necessary. This counters the reading passage’s claim that people
remove toxins from their bodies when they sleep. |
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The
reading passage contends that there are three theories which explain why people
sleep. However, the lecturer brings up several points that contradict this
argument.
First of
all, the lecturer insists that the positive impact of REM sleep for people’s
memory function has not been proven although(even if) sleeping
improves people’s memory function. This is because experiments
show that people who got no or rarely REM sleep still had good memories. This
rebuffs the reading passage’s assertion that getting
REM sleep enriches people’s cognitive abilities.
Second,
the speaker admits that getting sleep contribute for (helps the) ill or
injured people to restore their bodies. However, the speaker points out that
people cannot eat foods when they sleep. Therefore, people cannot build
up energies in their body. Practically, people eat immediately when they get up
in the morning since they lost(lose) their energy during
last night. As a result, it is only true that people’s
useless energy go away when they sleep. This casts doubt on the reading passage’s explanation that people can rejuvenate by sleeping since they save
their energy while they sleep.
Last, the
speaker indicates that everyone does not have same amount of poison. This is
due to the fact that people’s bodies absorb different amount of
toxin. Furthermore, in the experiment, subjects were deprived (of) sleep
during several days and then they slept in longer periods than
normal. Afterward, those people’s noxious matters’ levels are(were) lower
rather than normal. Hence, the result of experiment is inconclusive. In the
end, more clear researches are necessary. This counters the reading passage’s
claim that people remove toxins from their bodies when they sleep.
Writing 0-30 Score
Scale
Good (24-30)
Overall Comment: 글을 토플 통합형 형식 맞게 잘 구성했습니다. 각 포인트를 이해하기 쉽게 문장들을 잘 구성했습니다. 그러나, 적절하지 않은 단어 선택이 많습니다. 특히, 동사가 안 맞습니다. 사소한 문법 오류도 많습니다. 글 쓴 후, 꼭 검토해주시길 바랍니다.